The lady in blue

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5 BIG QUESTIONS-The lady in blue

Question 1: What makes this book/story good?

I think the twist at the end makes the story really intriguing and good to read.

And I also think that the show not tell makes the story really good.

Question 2: What would make this book/story better?

I think it would be better if the girl told her that she was her mum.

I think it’s a really good story, the link is here for more details.

I can use the 5 BIG QUESTIONS with ‘The Lady in Blue’

Cool robber bit that was meant to be included in my writing competition story, but I wanted everyone to see it

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At 3:09am I heard squeaking near my bedroom window. I was scared. I quickly woke up, pulling all my blankets up to my chin. I saw someone dressed in all black, holding a pole or something in his hand . He got the pole and lanced it into the window. All the glass shattered. He jumped into my room, spinning the pole in his hand. Shoot, it’s a crowbar.

“Hey, kid, show me where the money is and I won’t hurt you, because you can’t beat me. There’s nowhere to run,” said the robber.

“Never say never,” I whisper.

I run towards the robber and uppercut him in the stomach. He falls back. I kick him in the face, hard. My foot really hurts now. I punch him in the face 4 times. He falls to the ground, bruised, lip bleeding. I got his crowbar and put it up his shirt, then I threw him out the window into the garden. He landed in the roses. Ouch. Soon I went back to bed. When I woke up, the robber wasn’t there anymore, probably gone to hospital, I thought.

At 3:09am I heard squeaking near my bedroom window. I was scared. I quickly woke up, pulling all my blankets up to my chin. I saw someone dressed in all black, holding a pole in his hand or something. He got the pole and lanced it into the window. All the glass shattered. He jumps into my room, spinning the pole in his hand. Shoot it’s a crowbar.

“Hey, kid, show me where the money is and I won’t hurt you, because you can’t beat me. There’s nowhere to run,” said the robber.

“Never say never,” I whisper.

I run towards the robber and uppercut him in the stomach. He falls back. I kick him in the face, hard. My foot really hurts now. I punch him in the face 4 times. He falls to the ground, bruised, lip bleeding. I got his crowbar and put it up his shirt, then I threw him out the window into the garden. He landed in the roses. Ouch. Soon I went back to bed. When I woke up, the robber wasn’t there anymore, probably gone to hospital, I thought.

100 wc-…as it came rushing towards us we…

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I’m getting a new dog today! I have been wanting one for 3 years. But I’m  getting a pomeranian chihuahua. I’m going to name it Chi Chi. When I came home from school that day I was disappointed. Where’s the dog? I was meant to get it today. I waited for weeks and weeks. The dog just never came. One morning, though, a bright sunny morning, I found something out. My dog was meant to come today. The date was wrong. I was so happy. As it came rushing towards me that day, it was the greatest day of my life.

My forever home-reading homework

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Physical-The character is a cat. It didn’t really describe what the character looked like, but they said the cat had big ears. When the boy, Ethan, told him (or her?) that he/she had big ears it got quite offended. Its ears get a bit smaller throughout the story as it gets older. Its ears don’t really affect the character’s experiences at all.

 

Intellectual-The character isn’t very smart because cats aren’t usually that smart. The character knows how to get food, and it knows how to experience the good view of the sea. It doesn’t really do anything because just in the end you find out that it’s a cat. Yes, I do think it’s smart enough to thrive in its world. I don’t think the character actually learns anything.

 

Emotional-It feels a bit rejected at the start of the story, but then finds a family and wants to live with them. It becomes happy throughout the story. The character feels like it has a really good life. At the start it felt a bit sad because it kept getting booted out of its home, but then becomes happy.

 

Social-The character gets along really well with its owners. It chose its owners as friends because it said that they were nice. The character was the cat of the story and was nice to the owners.

 

Philosophical-it believes its life is good. The beliefs based on its owners and its home. It doesn’t really affect the character’s choices. Yes, they do believe what the cat thinks.

100 wc-Picture prompt

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I’m going to the aquarium today! I’m so excited to see the seals! I go to their enclosure and see all the super cute seals. That is why I love them, because they’re so cute. Everybody is taking photos of the really, really cute seal at the end of a small iceberg. It had big eyes and everyone really loved it. Everyone started crowding around the enclosure to see that same seal. But then everyone stopped. They all saw a seal that was lying on it’s side laughing it’s head off. It was contagious. So everyone else started laughing too!

100 wc- Cushion, Scarlet, Annoying, Watered, Violin

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I lay there, on my scarlet cushion. The soft fabric tickled my face. Nothing could ruin this moment. Zzzzzzzzzzzzz…

“AAAAAAHHH!” yelled my annoying little brother.

“What?” I yell.

“There’s a fire! OK, I’ll tell you what happened. I had watered the plants and I was having a play outside, then, I spotted the violin mum bought you for christmas and wanted to play it. So I got, but I accidently broke the string, so I felt guilty and lit it on fire. But the fire got too big!” he said.

“I am going to-” I started.

“Fire!” Someone screamed.

“MUM!!!”

 

 

100 wc-…but then the flash made me… (98)

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I am on holiday with my parents. I know what you’re thinking. That is so embarrassing. But no. My parents are THE coolest parents ever. They will take you to the most fun places you can think of. So I quickly packed and we were ready to go tomorrow morning. I went and had a good sleep. There was lighting last night. I went to brush my teeth, I looked in the mirror and saw a rat. I got scared. Wait? The flash made me a rat!!! I can not let mum and dad find out about this.